People may believe what they see from the picture. But there are many false imagine in this high technology world today. Anything you see could be false such as picture of the magazine, TV show and the blog’s picture.
We can see many beautiful girls or men on the cover of the magazine. You may think they so pretty, gorgeous, so slender and how do they did such pose. It’s just perfect human in this photo. However, it‘s so easy to deliver the perfect picture; the light, angle and PhotoShop contribute to the perfect picture. So it’s not necessary to envy or admire the model in the picture.
We usually heard someone invited a friend whom from the internet. When they saw each other they thought “Oh my god! Is he or she, the person, l knew on the website!?” That situation will be very embarrassed.
In short, people tend to show the most beautiful appearance for others, sometime they just want to fulfill themselves. We like to see the beautiful people equally.
Hi Jason,
回覆刪除寫的很好喔!organization也清楚
看來你是需要足夠的時間才能發揮寫作能力
因為你的mid-term...well, you'll find out later.
Anyway, I hope you can revise the following mistakes found in your article.
1. But there are many false imagine in this high technology world today.
imagine用錯，請修改
2. Anything you see could be false such as picture of the magazine, TV show and the blog’s picture.
picture是可數名詞，請修改
3. You may think they so pretty, gorgeous, so slender and how do they did such pose.
這裡的think they so pretty有問題，請修改
4. However, it‘s so easy to deliver the perfect picture; the light, angle and PhotoShop contribute to the perfect picture.
5. So it’s not necessary to envy or admire the model in the picture. (Good comment!)
6. We usually heard someone invited a friend whom from the internet.
第一、invited動詞形式有問題
第二、請把whom拿掉
7. When they saw each other they thought “Oh my god! Is he or she, the person, l knew on the website!?” That situation will be very embarrassed.
第一、when they saw each other they thought...
第一、中間需要一個逗號
第二、the person前後的逗號請拿掉
第三、embarrassed不該用過去分詞的形式
8. In short, people tend to show the most beautiful appearance for others, sometime they just want to fulfill themselves.
第一個the請改成their
for改成to
9. We like to see the beautiful people equally.
這個ending不怎麼對味
Jason, 你沒有修改喔...-_-
回覆刪除People may believe what they see from the picture. But there are many false images in this high technology world today. Anything you see could be false such as magazine's pictures, TV show and the blog’s picture.
回覆刪除We can see many beautiful girls or men on the cover of the magazine. You may think they're so pretty, gorgeous, so slender and how do they did such pose. It’s just perfect human in this photo. However, it‘s so easy to deliver the perfect picture; the light, angle and PhotoShop contribute to the perfect picture. So it’s not necessary to envy or admire the model in the picture.
We usually heard someone was inviting a friend from the internet. When they saw each other, they might think “Oh my god! Is he or she the person l knew on the website!?” That situation will be very embarrassing.
In short, people tend to show their most beautiful appearance to others, sometime they just want to fulfill themselves. So, we can’t judge a person by a pic